Bubbles of
life
laughter
thoughts
ideas
concepts
imagined worlds.
Feeling
- Safe
- Secure
- Free
- Happy
- Loved
and Appreciated.
Floating a while,
Rainbows Flash,
Bursting Eternally.
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I like how the poem is cast. I like how one word is often one line and yet more. I like also, the fact that the poem has no place nor tense (time) to it. If we look back to it, we can see that there is no present or future or past; and that makes it poetic, in my opinion.
Mysoul says - Thank you. Glad you found it meaningful and poetic.
Hi mysoul!
love this poem. been doing a lot of chakra meditation lately and using rainbow visualizations, so this resonates hugely for me.
What do you think of maybe going with “Bubbles / of / . . .” and then your list. I think you really only need one “of” and the rest are implied.
I especially love the ending, or rather what I see a a perpetuating nonending. I get the feel of the bubbles bursting, but I also envision an endless number of bubbles to pop!
Have a super day!
David
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Mysoul says - Thank you, will be editing it. You did get the essence of the poem. It is something that I see as non-ending. Like Dreams going pop when you wake.
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I like the buoyant tone to this poem; it’s invigorating, and has universal appeal because of its timelessness. Oh, and I also like the structure, mysoul..:)
Mysoul says - I had to give a different structure, just to walk on something I hadnt trodden on
Great lines there to unwind our tied up mind.
Mysoul says - Glad you enjoyed the read :).
The overall impression is the sweetness and fluidity of expression. You’re so liberated from norms with this one.
Mysoul says - I had to rebel against the rules.. It gets oppressive sometimes to conform. :).
I love your rebellion against the norms
“Floating a while,
Rainbows Flash,
Bursting Eternally”
Looks is like life is bursting forth, in full splendor!!!
Mysoul says -I believe it does always, it just requires our attention